| An Edelweiss | |
|
|
|
Pengirim | Message |
---|
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 20:07 | |
| She loved edelweiss. The little bushes and the small flowers that grew on a path behind his cabin that leads to a forest. She said she couldn’t find them in Seoul. He knew the busy streets of Seoul barely have enough ground to accommodate the ever-growing pedestrian so he took some of the bushes and kept them in a ceramic flowerpot for her.
She loved the fireflies that came out almost every night near an oak tree not too far away from their patio. She told him about the stories her late mother used to tell—the ones about her childhood in the island with her brother—and the fiery bugs they captured to light up their bedtime in a jar. So he once took her to capture some them and put them in a jar. She smiled wide enough to make his smile last the entire night.
She loved classical music too. Vivaldi and Tchaikovsky, also Bach and Beethoven. All in all violin and piano, though she wasn’t the one to play the instruments, as she is not a very musical person. So he went through his father’s collection of classical album and put them on every night until dawn so she would be able to sleep with her favorite symphonies playing in the background.
He loved books. So she huddled next to him in front of the fireplace at night, listening about how romance blossoms and kingdoms perish. Of King Henry and Julius Caesar to Jane Eyre and the lonely siren. He looked happy. She wanted him to be happy.
He loved flowers. Or so she thought because he spent a lot of time outside, putting bushes of edelweiss in pots and arranging them around the house. She didn’t mind though. The tiny flowers are the most beautiful things for her. So she would happily squat down next to him, holding out the ceramic flowerpot voluntarily to help him. He smiled. She was happy because his smile seemed sincere.
He loved the night sky—the calming darkness and the constellations up above the horizon with the twinkling lights across the pitch-black atmosphere. She would help him with their hot chocolate and they would sit on the balcony with blankets wrapped around their shoulders. He always smiled at the sight of the stars. She was always happy to see his smile as she tightens the blanket around them to chase the cold breeze away.
He didn’t need to know, did he?
“Over there is Sigma Draconis.” Daniel pointed out to the night sky. Seon-Ri could barely make out the star among thousands of brilliant constellations that splattered above their heads. “The eighteenth star. Can you see it?”
Seon-Ri shook her head, “I’m not a telescope.” She replied, giving her brother a look that made him laugh softly. She sighed quietly as she tightens her blanket around her shoulder. The night was getting colder but the night sky was impossible not to stare at. She always thought sleeping is a waste of time when you can see such a beautiful view just above your chamber door.
Her brother noticed her gesture and put an arm around her shoulder to bring her closer. “You’re getting cold, no?” He asked her with a small smile on his face. “Do you want to get inside? It’s already late.”
She could hear Yiruma playing softly in the background; looks like her brother had found her secret stash of music underneath her scattered keepsakes. “To sleep and to miss one second of this would be such a waste,” she spoke softly with her eyes locked on the sky.
Daniel patted her shoulder gently, “You know we can always see them anytime we want.”
Seon-Hae nodded, “But then it wouldn’t be as special, would it?”
Daniel blinked in confusion. “Special?”
His sister nodded softly, “Yes. The magic will rub off when you get too used to it.”
“I’ll make sure not to get used to it then.”
A/N: feedbacks and flames are appreciated | |
|
| |
Ruise V. Cort Penulis Parah
Jumlah posting : 6382 Points : 6522 Reputation : 45 Join date : 28.04.11 Age : 31 Lokasi : *sibuk dengan dunianya sendiri jadi nggak tahu sekitar*
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 20:15 | |
| Kak Aksara dipastikan bakalan seneng nih...
Awalnya sih mau protes kenapa pakai bahasa Inggris, cuma mengingat "she" sama "he" di Indo nggak akan bisa dibedain... yang memang cocoknya pakai bahasa Inggris ==" Cuma yang lain... (melirik SPer yang lain)
err... bisa buatin terjemahannya di quote? ._. | |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 20:27 | |
| ... terjemahannya... yaampun. aku nggak pernah terjemahin apapun seumur hidup... :><:
sanggup gak ya... anyways, makasih ya udah dibaca kak *nangis terharu gigit saputangan* | |
|
| |
Ruise V. Cort Penulis Parah
Jumlah posting : 6382 Points : 6522 Reputation : 45 Join date : 28.04.11 Age : 31 Lokasi : *sibuk dengan dunianya sendiri jadi nggak tahu sekitar*
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 20:31 | |
| Lah? kan buatanmu sendiri kan? ._." | |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 20:36 | |
| iya sih kak tapi kan tetep aja... takut aneh ._. | |
|
| |
Ruise V. Cort Penulis Parah
Jumlah posting : 6382 Points : 6522 Reputation : 45 Join date : 28.04.11 Age : 31 Lokasi : *sibuk dengan dunianya sendiri jadi nggak tahu sekitar*
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 20:40 | |
| Memang sih... bakalan susah. Apalagi penggunaan kata ganti orang buat bedain mana yang wanita dan prianya... | |
|
| |
Tamu Tamu
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 22:54 | |
| I am missing that time.... when I was a little and still a brat. . . Oh Audrey, you wrote a very beautiful story. . . Bagus benar loh Audrey... feelnya begitu kerasa..... kisahnya mengalir lembut dan menyenangkan, cocok buat buku anak-anak... oh.... Audrey... kamu berbakat deh buat buku anak-anak... Will be waiting for your next story.... and you made my eyes teary you little brat.... you are amazing |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 23:00 | |
| | |
|
| |
Ruise V. Cort Penulis Parah
Jumlah posting : 6382 Points : 6522 Reputation : 45 Join date : 28.04.11 Age : 31 Lokasi : *sibuk dengan dunianya sendiri jadi nggak tahu sekitar*
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 23:01 | |
| kalau ngomong bahasa inggris Kak Aksara kesannya kayak pria tua yang senang mengumpat ._. Dan buku anak-anak? ._. | |
|
| |
Tamu Tamu
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 23:16 | |
| Oh.. sorry >__< lensa saya menilai memakai lensa tua... yang sudah melanglang buana dengan berbagai pengalaman dan ... @__@ wanita. . . Cerita ini masih polos dan lembut, belum ternoda nafsu dan indah... seperti biasa yang di bayangkan anak-anak... atau gadis yang belum mengenal cinta.... jadi menurut saya cinta di sini masih indah... dan sangat menarik.... Maaf jika salah.... maksud saya.. api geloranya belum muncul. rasa dari cinta yang sebenarnya.. pemujaan tak berdasar belum keluar mungkin. . . panasnya api cinta yang membakar kewarasan... kegilaan yang ditimbulkan dan. . . cinta yang mendalam... Tapi cerpen Audrey bagus loh.. benar-benar bagus... terasa lembut dan penuh kemurnian hati Audrey yang indah dan polos... I really do like it |
|
| |
Ruise V. Cort Penulis Parah
Jumlah posting : 6382 Points : 6522 Reputation : 45 Join date : 28.04.11 Age : 31 Lokasi : *sibuk dengan dunianya sendiri jadi nggak tahu sekitar*
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 23:20 | |
| - Aksara wrote:
Cerita ini masih polos dan lembut, belum ternoda nafsu dan indah... seperti biasa yang di bayangkan anak-anak... atau gadis yang belum mengenal cinta.... jadi menurut saya cinta di sini masih indah... dan sangat menarik....
Maaf jika salah....
maksud saya.. api geloranya belum muncul. rasa dari cinta yang sebenarnya.. pemujaan tak berdasar belum keluar mungkin. . .
panasnya api cinta yang membakar kewarasan... kegilaan yang ditimbulkan dan. . . cinta yang mendalam...
Demi apa pun Kak... cinta nggak selamanya harus digambarkan penuh gelora seperti itu ==" Memang ada cinta yang seperti itu, tapi masalahnya kan cinta bisa berbagai artian... cinta yang sebaiknya nggak dimiliki juga ada... | |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 23:27 | |
| ... penafsirannya kak aksara romantis loh. in a way. tunggu kak, jangan bangga dulu. nggak ada maksud ngegombal.
tapi setuju sama kak ruise. dan cinta yang nggak menuntut itu justru adalah cinta yang paling indah di mata aku. jadi aku suka buat cerita yang kayak gini. | |
|
| |
Tamu Tamu
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Mon 28 May 2012 - 23:41 | |
| Makanya Audrey.. saya juga suka cerita ini... secara garis besar mungkin romance ada terbagi menjadi Romance teen atau remaja dan romance dewasa... Saya suka romance anak-anak dan teen karena masih polos dan bersih seperti salju.. sangat indah.. Audrey bahkan bisa menggambarkan semua itu dengan sangat indah.. I love it.. hehehe. . . Cuma kadang romance dewasa sudah penuh intrik, sakit hati, masalah ekonomi, dan tantangan lainnya yang membuat cinta itu tumbuh berkembang sangat indah atau rusak.... Maaf jika salah... Audrey tetap menulis yah suatu saat nanti kamu bisa dah punya buku sendiri hehehe * hug Audrey * aku memaafkanmu mengenai upilnya
Terakhir diubah oleh Aksara tanggal Tue 29 May 2012 - 15:24, total 1 kali diubah |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 15:21 | |
| aaaaaaa *cubitcubit* makasih kakaaaaaaaak. tapi mereka berdua itu udah gede loh ya. cuma yang mau aku sorot bukanlah masalah di sekitar mereka, tapi perasaan mereka berdua.
dan amiiiiiiiiiiiin. suatu saat ya. but english, i have no problem with, tapi indonesian... *tepar* bahasa indonesia itu susah banget. banget. | |
|
| |
Tamu Tamu
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 15:31 | |
| @__@ kita kebalikan deh... I have a problem with english... and indonesian I still have it too... Well whatever language you like to use as long as it can let your feeling flow.. then so be it... making a short story in english will have more prospect than just Indonesian, you can sell it too many country hehehehe. . . Congrats you have a talent to be a writer. . . in case if you want to be an author what is your dream? |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 15:52 | |
| ... can i post stories in French here? lololol jk.
nah kak. kalau bikinnya pake bahasa inggris, nanti nggak ada yang mau nerbitin D: i'd love to be an author. but i'm striving to be a fashion designer. mungkin sebagai sampingan xD | |
|
| |
Tamu Tamu
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 16:03 | |
| No one can read French except Google translate.... hahaha... Audrey Abigail Kurniawan... I like your picture gambar fashionnya bener bagus loh... hehehehe.... and the diet coke story board too... you are naturally talented at drawing too good luck for both .. |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 16:21 | |
| you... YOU STALKER. *le runs away* | |
|
| |
Ruise V. Cort Penulis Parah
Jumlah posting : 6382 Points : 6522 Reputation : 45 Join date : 28.04.11 Age : 31 Lokasi : *sibuk dengan dunianya sendiri jadi nggak tahu sekitar*
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 16:37 | |
| - crumpledcrane wrote:
- you... YOU STALKER. *le runs away*
Pft! Well, you're right. Sudah tak tertolong lagi | |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 16:38 | |
| | |
|
| |
Ruise V. Cort Penulis Parah
Jumlah posting : 6382 Points : 6522 Reputation : 45 Join date : 28.04.11 Age : 31 Lokasi : *sibuk dengan dunianya sendiri jadi nggak tahu sekitar*
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 16:42 | |
| kau kasih FBmu ke Kak Aksara? ._. | |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 16:45 | |
| NGGAK. KOK DIA BISA TAU?! | |
|
| |
Ruise V. Cort Penulis Parah
Jumlah posting : 6382 Points : 6522 Reputation : 45 Join date : 28.04.11 Age : 31 Lokasi : *sibuk dengan dunianya sendiri jadi nggak tahu sekitar*
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 16:52 | |
| ._. Kak Aksara stalker abis ._. | |
|
| |
crumpledcrane Penulis Senior
Jumlah posting : 579 Points : 601 Reputation : 0 Join date : 27.05.12 Age : 29 Lokasi : Jakarta
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 16:56 | |
| aku mau berlindung. mau nempel sama kak ruise aja. dia mengerikan. | |
|
| |
Ruise V. Cort Penulis Parah
Jumlah posting : 6382 Points : 6522 Reputation : 45 Join date : 28.04.11 Age : 31 Lokasi : *sibuk dengan dunianya sendiri jadi nggak tahu sekitar*
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss Tue 29 May 2012 - 17:02 | |
| Hihi, aku lumayan bahaya lho kalau lagi mood ^^ | |
|
| |
Sponsored content
| Subyek: Re: An Edelweiss | |
| |
|
| |
| An Edelweiss | |
|